A civil engineer saved a worker life during casting a Dam, but he slipped inside the reinforcement cage and trapped there. With walkie-talkie and 45 minutes the Civil Engineer have to clarify his care to his family and friends.
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A civil engineer saved a worker life during casting a Dam, but he slipped inside the reinforcement cage and trapped there. With walkie-talkie and 45 minutes the Civil Engineer have to clarify his care to his family and friends.
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In general loglines are written in the present tense. Since what’s happening on the screen is happening now.
“When he becomes trapped in the reinforcement cage while casting a dam, A heroic civil engineer has 45 minutes to…”
Now we are getting to the part of the logline I don’t understand. What exactly does the line “have to clarify his care to his family and friends” mean.
Does this mean after getting trapped the rest of the movie is the engineer on his walkie-talkie telling his friends and family, I want this wood for my casket, this type of flowers at my grave, I want this song played at the funeral, I want my head stone to read “He was a loving father”
Once I understand what that line means it will be easier to help with the rest of the logline.
Agreed with Richiev. The plot is unclear and the wording confusing.
Adding to this is the fact that there are two potential main characters, who do you prefer as the MC the engineer or the employee?
Need to clarify things, fix the grammar and make the story more clear. He saves another work and now With walkie-talkie and 45 minutes the Civil Engineer have to clarify his care to his family and friends??? Why?
My two-cents would be to add a sympathetic flaw to the protagonist. What makes us (the audience) want to root for him during the runtime? Is he lonely? Is he a family man? Is he young? Hope this helps.