A color blind pianist makes it rain every time he plays his symphonies. One melody at a time, he fills colors in the lives of people who listen to him play. On his last show, he mistakenly opens the door to his painful past. If the show must go on, he has to face his demons and let the light prevail.
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A color blind pianist makes it rain every time he plays his symphonies. One melody at a time, he fills colors in the lives of people who listen to him play. On his last show, he mistakenly opens the door to his painful past. If the show must go on, he has to face his demons and let the light prevail.
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I can’t make heads or tails of this.
Are these descriptions metaphors “…makes it rain…” i.e the audience cries? Or does his music literally cause rainfall?
What is his goal?
What motivates him to achieve the goal?
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On rule of thumb in loglines is; Clarity over all.
Concept and structure aside, you need to clearly communicate the elements of a story no matter what.
If you shorten the logline and give specifics it improve this logline.
Also, i don’t understand how ‘colorblind’ correlates to music. However, If he was deaf I would understand who it could affect the story,