A day in the life of an industrious London school girl and her friends as her crime boss father faces conflict.

Hi Will Arthur,

I’ll give this a go.

INTENTION: ?
OBSTACLE: ?

Now I’m going to use what you’ve given me to try to come up with a logline with a stronger intention and obstacle…

First attempt:
When she discovers a photo of her crime boss stepfather murdering someone,
a school girl and friends must get the photo to police, before a hitman catches up.

– I think “a day in the life” is hopefully suggested here.
– Intention: must get photo police. (perhaps too easy.)
– Obstacle: a hitman.

How about one when the crime boss father is a good guy.

Second attempt:
When her crime boss father is framed for a murder he didn’t commit,
his school girl daughter goes on the run with evidence to clear his name, and must get to a trusted source before a hitman catches up.

– I kinda figured perhaps getting to a police station would be too easy. Perhaps the cops are corrupt? Perhaps she needs to get to a trusted FBI man or something? Certainly – the obstacle needs to be formidable.
– Again, hopefully “a day in the life” is suggested here.
– We probably don’t need “industrious”. “London” is optional.

Okay. Good luck!