A detective being investigated on historic corruption charges becomes an ideal candidate for an off-the books assignment to locate missing evidence.
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A detective being investigated on historic corruption charges becomes an ideal candidate for an off-the books assignment to locate missing evidence.
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This is the setup (10 pages max), what about the premise, inner and exterior conflicts, dramatic need. You need to state that in a logline.
As Nettle said, What happens next?
This off-the book assignment to locate missing evidence…… tell us more about it…… in such a way that his Goal becomes visible
Good Luck theplaneteers
Agree with Nettle and variable. Also, there are potentially two stories in the current logline: the corruption charges and the off-the-books assignment. They need to be connected to each other somehow. If this isn’t your plan consider making the detective someone who was charged with corruption but got off on a technicality (or something like that). Then you don’t need to worry about resolution but you can still have a reveal as to whether he was guilty or not that plays into the off-the-books assignment story. I hope that makes sense.
Who decides he is a candidate for an off-the-books assignment?
Missing evidence of what?
What are the stakes? What bad thing happens if he fails?
What is the lead supposed to accomplish?
What IS the inciting incident?? What’s the logical connection between the corruption charges and the assignment,? how does the? former trigger the latter?
What are “HISTORIC corruption charges”? And as others have said, this is set up. I have no idea if he even takes the assignment, yanno? 🙂