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A distraught murder survivor sent to an experimental therapy centre to overcome her longstanding terror must escape from the therapists before they exploit her deepest fears to satisfy their cannibalistic hunger.
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The phrase “A distraught murder survivor” makes little sense. A person cannot survive their own murder. Does replacing the whole first half of the sentence with “A woman suffering PTSD after an attempt on her life is sent to an experimental therapy centre, but…” help?
The phrase “they exploit her deepest fears to satisfy their cannibalistic hunger” is hard to interpret. Are they threatening to eat her? Or are they some kind of alien life form that thrives by draining people’s emotional energy?
Finally, it is understandable that she wants to escape, but what of the other inmates? Her goal must be either to organize a mass escape or to reach the police who will then the free the others. If she escapes by herself and walks away, the audience will hate her.