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Posted: July 19, 20142014-07-19T01:20:55+10:00 2014-07-19T01:20:55+10:00In: Public

A dog-headed novice leaves his monastery at the command of the elder to capture and tame the remaining mythological beasts which threaten 4th century Jerusalem.

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    1. dpg Singularity
      2014-07-19T04:57:53+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 4:57 am

      So the head monk doesn’t have enough faith that God can take care of the situation in Jerusalem Himself, that he dispatches a “dog-headed novitiate”?

      Sorry to be flippant, but why would the elder send, of all people, a novitiate, a babe in the faith? And is ‘dog-headed’ supposed to refer to a character flaw? And why are the mythological beasts threatening Jerusalem in the 4th century CE, not the 3rd, or 5th or some other historical period?

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2014-07-19T04:57:53+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 4:57 am

      So the head monk doesn’t have enough faith that God can take care of the situation in Jerusalem Himself, that he dispatches a “dog-headed novitiate”?

      Sorry to be flippant, but why would the elder send, of all people, a novitiate, a babe in the faith? And is ‘dog-headed’ supposed to refer to a character flaw? And why are the mythological beasts threatening Jerusalem in the 4th century CE, not the 3rd, or 5th or some other historical period?

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    3. logeye
      2014-07-19T05:50:32+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 5:50 am

      Whoops, you’re right, should be 5th century. The elder is Symeon the Stylite, a legendary saint of that time, and the dog-man, who becomes known as St Christopher the Dog-Headed, teams up with George, the dragon-slayer also of that time, who needs some lessons on dog-like devotion. Christopher has been having some behavior trouble since his elder moved to the top of a sixty foot column, so he gets sent away to tame himself. Think Sound of Music, only with griffins. Which info should I include in the logline? At least it got your attention enough to ask questions.

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    4. logeye
      2014-07-19T05:50:32+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 5:50 am

      Whoops, you’re right, should be 5th century. The elder is Symeon the Stylite, a legendary saint of that time, and the dog-man, who becomes known as St Christopher the Dog-Headed, teams up with George, the dragon-slayer also of that time, who needs some lessons on dog-like devotion. Christopher has been having some behavior trouble since his elder moved to the top of a sixty foot column, so he gets sent away to tame himself. Think Sound of Music, only with griffins. Which info should I include in the logline? At least it got your attention enough to ask questions.

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    5. logeye
      2014-07-19T06:00:31+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 6:00 am

      Having the head of a dog can be both a blessing and a curse. A dog-headed, etc. That should address the character flaw.

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    6. logeye
      2014-07-19T06:00:31+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 6:00 am

      Having the head of a dog can be both a blessing and a curse. A dog-headed, etc. That should address the character flaw.

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    7. dpg Singularity
      2014-07-19T06:35:20+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 6:35 am

      A challenge to your logline is that the time setting is one very few people are likely to know anything about. On the other foot, the obscurity of the period gives you greater creative license to make whatever you want with the confusing history and multiplicity of legends.

      Seems to me a better focus might be to do an origin story on St. George as the protagonist with Christopher as his sidekick/ally. (With St. George as the focus, you can better work in the “B” story of the rescue of the maiden.) Make it buddy/bromance film. In the style of a “Monty Python” send up of the period and people.

      fwiw.

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    8. dpg Singularity
      2014-07-19T06:35:20+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 6:35 am

      A challenge to your logline is that the time setting is one very few people are likely to know anything about. On the other foot, the obscurity of the period gives you greater creative license to make whatever you want with the confusing history and multiplicity of legends.

      Seems to me a better focus might be to do an origin story on St. George as the protagonist with Christopher as his sidekick/ally. (With St. George as the focus, you can better work in the “B” story of the rescue of the maiden.) Make it buddy/bromance film. In the style of a “Monty Python” send up of the period and people.

      fwiw.

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    9. logeye
      2014-07-19T06:51:39+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 6:51 am

      Yeah, it’s a fantasy comedy along those lines. The maiden subplot is a love triangle with a twist. I don’t want it to veer into spoof, because I lose any chance at true emotion.

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    10. logeye
      2014-07-19T06:51:39+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2014 at 6:51 am

      Yeah, it’s a fantasy comedy along those lines. The maiden subplot is a love triangle with a twist. I don’t want it to veer into spoof, because I lose any chance at true emotion.

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