The Charlatan.
A fake psychic is haunted by real spirits as they force him to right his wrongs and just annoy the hell out of him.
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Good dramatic irony with a fake psychic but real spirits.
Not sure if the stakes are high enough. Just annoying him? Would he really right his wrongs to avoid this? Not sure of the genre but sounds like a comedy.
Also, there may be a better way to describe his wrongs. I don’t see a clear goal. If he rights his wrongs will the spirits leave him alone?
I agree, it’s great until you get to annoy. Do people think he’s losing his mind? Are they tourturous ghosts? A hint about the motivation of the ghosts might help.
I love it! The title is perfect, too. I immediately thought of Whoopie’s character in “Ghost”, as that would have been a perfect spin-off of that movie. I’m curious as to whom you see playing “The Charlatan”.
My only thought was to add the word “to”: “A fake psychic is haunted by real spirits, forcing him to right his wrongs and… just to annoy the hell out of him!”
I think it’s hilarious! I immediately thought of Ricky Gervais, but he did one similar to this a few years back (“Ghost Town”).
That’s great, thank you so much for the feedback!
What if the ghosts stole his soul and traded it to the devil, and now in order to avoid an eternity in damnation, her agrees to do the devils work and right his wrongs by coming clean to the family of the antichrist ??
Just a thought that might help 😀
I like the concept but it just misses out on that “sink your teeth into” feeling..
How is he going to right his wrongs ??
How many wrongs ??
What is he risking ??
Why are they haunting him ??
Love the irony, makes me think of “Groundhog Day” meets “The Frighteners”
Happy writing 😀
Tor
“A fake psychic is haunted by real spirits as they force him to right his wrongs and just annoy the hell out of him.”
They force him to annoy the hell out of himself? Huh? And how can they force him to do anything if they’re just spirits? Do his wrongs have something to do with his being a fake, or is it something else?
The irony of the protagonist’s predicament is clear, but what’s at stake for him is not – nor is the antagonist’s motivation. And if whatever wrongs this guy has committed are serious enough for spirits to reveal themselves and accost him, he’s probably not a very sympathetic character.
If, however, the spirits need his help to accomplish something they, as spirits, are not able to, and he agrees initially just so they’ll stop annoying him, but along the way he actually starts to care about them and learns something about himself?all of that is understandable, but you’ve got to hint at it with the logline. Maybe something like:
“When a fake psychic is haunted by real spirits, he must find a way to help them move on before their antics get him locked up for good.”
That shows there’s something at stake for everybody, and it’s all tied in together. Could be a lot of fun!
“A fake psychic is haunted by real spirits as they force him to right his wrongs and just annoy the hell out of him.”
They force him to annoy the hell out of himself? Huh? And how can they force him to do anything if they’re just spirits? Do his wrongs have something to do with his being a fake, or is it something else?
The irony of the protagonist’s predicament is clear, but what’s at stake for him is not – nor is the antagonist’s motivation. And if whatever wrongs this guy has committed are serious enough for spirits to reveal themselves and accost him, he’s probably not a very sympathetic character.
If, however, the spirits need his help to accomplish something they, as spirits, are not able to, and he agrees initially just so they’ll stop annoying him, but along the way he actually starts to care about them and learns something about himself?all of that is understandable, but you’ve got to hint at it with the logline. Maybe something like:
“When a fake psychic is haunted by real spirits, he must find a way to help them move on before their antics get him locked up for good.”
That shows there’s something at stake for everybody, and it’s all tied in together. Could be a lot of fun!