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lucafleaPenpusher
Posted: December 9, 20202020-12-09T04:10:40+10:00 2020-12-09T04:10:40+10:00In: Short Film

A famous and renown band leader can’t play and tour anymore and looks back at when it all started in his childhood

The third act / music video of a fictional band leader (guitarist) who went through the eighties, the nineties and finally needs to resign.

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      Mike Pedley Singularity
      2020-12-10T19:02:25+10:00Added an answer on December 10, 2020 at 7:02 pm

      If you want the conflict to be in the band leader’s young life that he’s looking back at, I would consider writing it without suggesting the older guy is looking back at his life. Whilst it helps tell a story, the bulk of the plot is happening in the past. Alternatively frame it like “A famous band leader reflects on his career where he blah blah blah blah”. This way, you’re almost using the present tense as “world building” – it’s needed to understand something about the plot.

      Hope this helps.

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      • lucaflea Penpusher
        2020-12-11T23:26:31+10:00Replied to answer on December 11, 2020 at 11:26 pm

        Thanks.
        Really inspiring and useful.

        Would you use this even if it’s a music video?

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        • Mike Pedley Singularity
          2020-12-14T18:41:26+10:00Replied to answer on December 14, 2020 at 6:41 pm

          I don’t see why not. I think a logline can be used effectively for any means of storytelling. If there’s a narrative, you can logline it.

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2020-12-09T23:39:28+10:00Added an answer on December 9, 2020 at 11:39 pm

      Where is the conflict?
      What is stoping the lead character from looking back on his career?

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