After a member of the Gonzo Girls unexpectedly dies; Santana, Veronica, Shoshana, and Olympia must stop the advertisers from cancelling their show on the fledgling pop-culture network by Sweeps Week.

The last revision of the logline is very?wordy,?and?describes too few plot points.

I direct?you?to my original comments, describe a single main character with a single goal. ?Also, no names should be mentioned in the logline, unless it’s a biopic or based on widely known historical events.

Here is a formula for you to use, stick to this structure when constructing your next draft:

After an out of the ordinary and significant event happens to a flawed main character, he or she are motivated to take a specific action in order to accomplish a compelling goal.

This is to vague and complex to pass as a logline. Best you review the Training tab up top to see what the critical components of a logline are.

But to get you started on? your road to logline perfection:

Who is the main character?

What does he or she want?

What is preventing them from getting what they want?

Answer ONLY the above questions in a single sentance, and we will be able to help you construct a logline from that.