a frustrated female werecat trying to be with the woman she loves discovers an ancient secret hidden beneath the city and fights alongside a surprising ally to prevent all out destruction
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a frustrated female werecat trying to be with the woman she loves discovers an ancient secret hidden beneath the city and fights alongside a surprising ally to prevent all out destruction
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Louise,
The werecat theme should be the main draw in this. Any possible way you can describe this anti-hero to us in more detail? Finding a secret under a city is well… not very feature driving. I can’t think how it will drive the whole story narrative. Surprising alley means nothing to the log.
A woman (sometimes or always?) transforms into a wolf-like creature with primal tendencies to…
It sounds as if the discovery is what set’s the story in motion. If that is the case I would be more descriptive as to what ancient secret is, since the discovery is what the lead will be fighting against.
“…a frustrated female werecat trying to be with the woman she loves…” this part of the logline adds nothing relevant to the plot.
Best to cut that part and change it to a character flaw that will make it harder for her to achieve her goal.
As Richiev noted, the discovery of a danger to the whole city is a the inciting incident – many lives are suddenyl at risk. This means that her goal will be to stop the destruction and it needs to be described as such in the logline.? Best to include the type of danger the city is in and the action she will take to stop it.