A inflexible stoic self-disciplined detective has trust issues due to a traumatic past making moving forward in life an obstacle.
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A inflexible stoic self-disciplined detective has trust issues due to a traumatic past making moving forward in life an obstacle.
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This logline sketches out a subjective issue.? And in vague terms.?And the subjective issue, a traumatic past, is backstory.
But an industry standard logline is not about the protagonist’s struggle with a subjective issue. A logline is not about the backstory, but the action going forward in time.? An industry standard logline is? about the struggles of a protagonist against obstacles and antagonists to achieve an objective goal.? Not a vaguely defined goal, either, but a specifically defined one.
See the guidelnes under “Forumula” at the top of the web page for writing an industry standard logline.
“Moving on” is the story. Tell us that. A detective wants a relationship with xxxx but he is held back by events in his past.
Then keep working from there.
What event does the story revolve around.
Most people seem to struggle with describing their MC even briefly. You are the flip side, over describing.
As dpg and Craig suggest, let’s try to boil down what your story is. You say romance, so perhaps mention the other party involved and what’s unique about their get together.
Agreed with all the above comments.
Loglines describe a plot in the ‘now’ by using a sequence of events that lead to a single goal.
Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar for more details.