Logliner
Posted: 2019-04-04T07:09:08+10:00 In:

A killer for hire, with PTSD, continues to murder while she anguishes and procrastinates over another assigned job. . . . Her psychologist.

A killer for hire, with PTSD, continues to murder while she anguishes and procrastinates over another assigned job. . . . Her psychologist.
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    1. Logliner

      Thank you everyone on your comments, advice, and ideas.? This logline presents many imaginable twist,? conundrums, as well as many new story directions.
      I’m going to put this one away for a few months and let it percolate.
      Again,thanks everyone.

      Steve

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    2. Singularity

      Another twisty question occurs to me:

      Why is the shrink on a hit list?? What is the dark ghost in his past?? If she’s been hiding her past (and present), then so has he?

      So there could be a tandem character arc for both.? In order for each to help the other, they have to come clean with their pasts.

      fwiw

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    3. Singularity

      There has to be a compelling reason why she NEEDS the shrink,? why she gets impaled on the horns of a dilemma .? PTSD works for me. Or maybe she’s bipolar — that may create? interesting complications in? the 2nd and 3rd Acts.

      However, building on mikepedley85’s idea:

      What if another hit man gets the job to off her shrink?? But she volunteers to take the job — so she can save him?.? She stalls for time to develop a plan and break the news to him.? And finally the job is given to the guy with a deadline.? Now she must act.

      fwiw

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    4. Singularity

      I agree with dpg. There must be a reason why she can’t just walk away.

      I don’t think the fact she has PTSD adds anything. Where’s the PTSD from?

      Her action currently is to “anguish and procrastinate”. This means the bulk of the action in the film is seeing someone struggling to make a decision (admittedly while they’re killing other people). The majority of the action happens inside the characters head – how are you going to visually show her struggling with this choice.

      Why not flip it…? She sees her psychologist come up on a list of hits and she has to save him from all the other hitmen.

      Hope this helps.

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    5. Singularity

      And interesting premise, but…

      What’s at stake?? Not just in terms of the emotional support she loses if she kills her shrink, but also in terms of what she will lose if she doesn’t kill him?

      She’s described as a killer for hire , a free lancer.? ?Doesn’t that mean? can she turn down the job offer?? Why didn’t she turn it down?? Why? is it an offer she can’t refuse?? Why MUST she kill him?

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