Penpusher
Posted: 2018-07-27T03:59:57+10:00 In:

A mentally & physically abused teen witnesses the murder of his family. Now an Adult, he enacts revenge on the entire family responsible.

A mentally & physically abused teen witnesses the murder of his family. Now an Adult, he enacts revenge on the entire family responsible.
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    2 Reviews

    1. Uberwriter

      The only thing you need to add is some detail around the family responsible.

      Being specific in a logline that explains a well worn genre, like revenge. But you do get some free brain power from the reader because we all know what a revenge story looks like.

      The abuse adds to the depth of imagine I conjure when reading a logline.

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    2. Penpusher

      How does the mental and physical abuse relate to the murdered family or the murdering family?

      The concept sounds interesting, but familiar, and a special twist would make it juicy.

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