Logliner
Posted: 2016-04-29T12:57:28+10:00 In:

A misanthropic girl and her rebellious friend are constantly looking for thrills to lighten up their dull lives but when she learns her half-sister has supernatural powers, she realizes having a normal life isn’t so bad.

A misanthropic girl and her rebellious friend are constantly looking for thrills to lighten up their dull lives but when she learns her half-sister has supernatural powers, she realizes having a normal life isn’t so bad.
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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      This logline doesn’t describe an inciting incident (event) or a goal, and as such doesn’t describe a plot.

      What will she do? Why? And to what end? These are the vital pieces of information missing from your logline.

      I can’t make any suggestions as the are not enough details to go off.

      Best if you define an event that pushes her/motivates her to take action in order to achieve a goal.

      Check out the training tab up top for more information.

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    2. Singularity

      Loglines are about action, the intentional struggle for an objective goal, not about lessons learned which come as an unintended consequence. ? As suggested by Nir Shelter, the ?”Training” option at the top of this ?web page has guidelines for the elements that should go into an industry standard logline.

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    3. Mentor

      Hello,
      is this for a feature lenght movie or a short?
      In my opinion this could be a quite accurate synopsis for a short.
      As a feature lenght movie, I share the opinions of the previous commenters.
      In detail, I’m not confortable with a character who “realize” something: this is ‘internal’, a logline should focus on the ‘external’ to attract me.

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