A naïve lawyer loses everything when he is targeted by an unscrupulous gang. He commits himself to infiltrating the group that wronged him to exact his revenge.
Jeff MuttonPenpusher
A naïve lawyer loses everything when he is targeted by an unscrupulous gang. He commits himself to infiltrating the group that wronged him to exact his revenge.
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My comments will focus on the beginning of your logline, make this your own – hope this helps:
What transpired between the gang and the protag that put into motion the loss of everything e.g. “After losing the drug trafficking case for a notorious gang, a rookie lawyer…”
Take care.
He’s going to infiltrate a gang — and no one is going to notice or suspect the outsider, the strange new face? Or recognize his appearance and voice?
Aren’t gangs tightly knit social units where new comers can only gain access by being vouched for someone who is already a bona fide insider?
Also, the logline lacks a clear statement of his game plan. “Exact his revenge” is vague, a generality. Loglines need to be clear and specific as to the plot, the action line of the story. *Exactly* how does he intend to take his revenge?