A professional interplanetary Anti christ falls in love with the christ figure on a new planet and must find a way to stop Armageddon so they can live happily ever after.

Hi Hebe,

Okay, let’s take that logline apart…

Protagonist: “A professional interplanetary antichrist…” I’m not certain I know what that means exactly, which makes interpreting the rest of the logline almost impossible.

Struggle with Antagonist: “… falls in love with the christ figure on a new planet and must find a way to stop Armageddon…” I suppose this is where the main conflict should come from. However, how do you visualise a love affair with the christ figure. I am just going to assume this is a comedy, since that is the only way I personally see this working. Why is the new planet important here and where is Armageddon suddenly coming from? Would be nice to at least have a hint here whether we’re facing some natural catastrophe or a villain and what exactly the protagonist must do in order to prevent disaster. That would also give us a clue in what ways the hero is actually ill-suited or well-suited for the task.

Death Stakes / Tangible Consequence of Failure: “… so they can live happily ever after.” That means it’s at heart a love story, which is always a good stake to play. I would try to clarify the main source of conflict, which is the part with the Armageddon and why exactly our hero actually needs to be the hero of the story, as many people would lose their loved ones.

Hope that contains something useful.

Cheers,
BeeZeeBee