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A recently divorced doctor and an entrepreneur facing an existential crisis, form an unlikely partnership and take the help of earthly wizards to overcome the trials of life.
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A divorcee, an entrepreneur and an existential crisis sound like an interesting mix with potential for comedy, not sure that was the intention though.
However the logline is confusing because of incorrect grammar and confusing plot structure.
Is there a need for a dual protagonist?
Who is the main character?
What is the inciting incident?
What is the goal?
What are the obstacles?
And what is at stake?
Use the answers to these questions to re draft the logline because the story is too vague to comment on at the moment.
Hope this helps.
I agree with the other comment. Your logline doesn’t hint at any plot, and is overall very vague. Who are these wizards? What does this unlikely partnership result in? Some type of road trip or something? What happens in this film?
>>>to overcome the trials of life
That covers a l-o-t of territory. A plot should focus on one specific problem that needs to be urgently solved.
Same again, there line sounds interesting, but lacks clarity. ‘Trials of life’ is ambiguous, and there term ‘earthly wizards’ is confusing; is the MC not from Earth? That said, it is still possible to see a potential story within the line, but it is just unclear what the story is specifically about.
Also, my first review, so probably don’t take the critique too seriously.