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Rutger OosterhoffLogliner
Posted: October 2, 20172017-10-02T22:37:52+10:00 2017-10-02T22:37:52+10:00In: Drama

A religious psychopath working as a TV medium gets conflicted when a dead cardinal begs him to spare his bastard daughter, the psychopaths’ female co-worker.

A religious psychopath working as a TV medium gets conflicted when a dead cardinal begs him to spare his bastard daughter, the psychopaths’ female co-worker.
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    1. Rutger Oosterhoff Logliner
      2017-10-03T18:25:53+10:00Added an answer on October 3, 2017 at 6:25 pm

      It’s a bit like American Psycho:

      ‘A wealthy New York investment banking executive hides his alternate psychopathic ego from his co-workers and friends as he delves deeper into his violent, hedonistic fantasies. ”
      Seeing this logline there is no clear plor description too.And no clear stakes either.

      But I agree with that there is no clear plotdesciption. The word that stands for the plot description is “Conflicted”Should he still kill her now he nows her dead father is/was a cardinal. I mean?the psycho ?being religious.

      “who’s daughter?”–the dead cardinal’s daughter.

      “Why female? ”

      Yes, I thought about a love interest. She loving him.
      The stakes:?the cardinals daughter?not be killed by the psycho.

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    2. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2017-10-03T10:17:29+10:00Added an answer on October 3, 2017 at 10:17 am

      Agreed with DPG.

      The wording in this logline is hard to understand, whose daughter should be spared the dead cardinal’s or the medium’s? And, spare from what exactly? What does the “…female co-worker…” have to do with the story? Why female? This describes half the population, is there a more specific description that would make her relevant to the plot?

      In addition to the plot being unclear, the stakes are not clear either.

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    3. dpg Singularity
      2017-10-03T09:10:31+10:00Added an answer on October 3, 2017 at 9:10 am

      I am unable to get a handle on the story.? It sets up a situation, sort of, but doesn’t follow through with a full-fledged plot.? Because “gets conflicted” tells me nothing about what becomes the objective goal to be pursued by, I presume, the psychopath as a result of this visitation from the dead.

      What’s the plot? And why should I care about the protagonist when he seems to be such an unlikable character?

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