A schizophrenic young woman lives in constant suspicion of her life being surveilled and manipulated. A seemingly endless witch hunt for the truth takes place as she can’t seem to trust anyone.
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A schizophrenic young woman lives in constant suspicion of her life being surveilled and manipulated. A seemingly endless witch hunt for the truth takes place as she can’t seem to trust anyone.
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What you have described is a situation
What is the lead character’s goal
and who or what is standing in her way
“..as she can’t seem to trust anyone” seems repetitive after her “living in constant suspicion”………which tells us about her circumstances. It doesn’t clears up the INCITING INCIDENT
Also, what is the nature of this “seemingly endless witch hunt for the truth”. Isn’t that what most thrillers are about? A layer of misdirection as a tool to direct attention.
Finally as a result of your Inciting incident, what becomes her objective GOAL?
The premise is an interesting one but lacks specificity
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Delusions of paranoia are a defining? symptom of schizophrenic disorders.? So it seems to me that her objective goal would need to entail convincing a significant other (such as a boy friend or cop) to believe her, that her life really is threaten by a very specific danger.? What, specifically, is that danger?
“When the police don’t believe someone is out to get her, a schizophrenic woman is determined to discover who or what is hiding inside her old Victorian home.”