A shy courier is overheard on police phone taps manned by his brother in law when he pursues a romance with the girlfriend of a wanted criminal.
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A shy courier is overheard on police phone taps manned by his brother in law when he pursues a romance with the girlfriend of a wanted criminal.
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As Rutger said.? The logline sets up a situation for a plot but it does not fulfill the primary purpose of a logline which is to succinctly describe a plot.? In this case, the logline needs to clearly indicate who is the protagonist.? Is it the shy courier or is it his brother-in-law?? Whoever it is, what becomes the objective goal as a consequence of the electronic eavesdropping?? Who/what opposes the protagonist in his struggle to achieve his objective goal?? What’s at stake?
This only describes a situation.