A small town reporter tells a little white-lie to boost his ego and it snowballs out of controll. He must now make that lie a reality or be shamed out of town.
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A small town reporter tells a little white-lie to boost his ego and it snowballs out of controll. He must now make that lie a reality or be shamed out of town.
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Agree with the other reviews. The first thing that caught my eye was little white lie.? If it were in quotation marks, it might give? it a larger significance, ?meaning it might actually be a larger lie and the?reader will wonder what it really is.?I like the concept and can immediately relate to the story. What if he told the lie to a specific person he thought he could trust and they can’t hold a secret?? As word gets out about the big lie than the challenge becomes even greater and maybe even more fun.
Agree with savinh0 that “white lie” is not specific enough to give a logline reader a focused view as to where the story is going to go.? Which a logline should do.? It needs to be spelled out.? Ditto with the objective goal.
Bivric,
I think you have a promising idea here. White lies are always fun to watch on television.
On the other hand, the construction of the logline is not good and your words are too vague.
This is a renewed attempt, maybe it helps:
“When his little white-lie snowballs out of control, a small town reporter must make that lie a reality before he gets shamed out of town.”
But I don’t like the terms “white lie.” It’s not very specific and can mean anything. You need a strong hook in your plot to spice your concept up;
so it can stand out against thousands of other pitches.? What specific lie did he spread and what does he have to do to make that lie a reality?
Best,
Savas