Vision From A Beautiful Smile
A story of three heroin addicts leading their life to paranoia and bizzare delusions after being outlawed by their family and friends.
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Definite improvement!
I’m glad to hear that. Thank you though. You are a writer too ?
The thing that strikes me first is that your protagonist has not been identified. With three different heroin addicts you should have three emotional arcs in the film. But one of them is going to be the stronger, more central arc of the film. By defining who the main character is, you will be able to define the irony of the story, and thus will be able to use that as the “hook” in your logline.
At the moment, the only information I have about your movie is ‘there are some addicts whose family and friends are unhappy with them.’ I wouldn’t watch your movie yet, because there is nothing in that which “hooks” me in, or suggests something different to what I’ve seen before. It’s not a story.
Who is it about, and what are they trying to do, and what are the antagonistic forces stopping them from achieving their goal?
(Or have I misread? Is the goal of the three a life of paranoia and delusions, and the family and friends are the obstacles they must overcome before they can have that? If so, my apologies. Still … there’s nothing new about some addicts wanting to remain high and their friends and family not wanting that. What’s different or fresh about your film?)
I like to think so. I’ve posted one logline, probably will post more as I feel the need.