Untitled – Horror
It’s like Black Snake Moan meets Night of the Living Dead with a sprinkle of My Girl.
A strict single father, with a hot daughter, defends his home, when she purposefully summons a spell which attracts every horny male in town.
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I would remove “single”, remove the comma after “home” and change “which” to “that”. Otherwise, it’s excellent. One issue I have- you say it’s a horror. It’s sounds like more of a dark comedy. That could be an isue going forward.
Excellent job, and a great concept!
Thanks Sharkeatingman, You are right about horror being a problem, it’s more of a horror comedy which I should have put in the first place but really appreciate the feedback. I seem to have trouble with grammar and punctuation most of the time, it’s something I’ve been working on since the eighth grade.
Revised: “A strict father, with a hot daughter, defends his home when she purposefully summons a spell that attracts every horny male in town” – zombie_3184
Untitled – Horror Comedy or Dark Comedy
It’s like Black Snake Moan meets Night of the Living Dead with a sprinkle of My Girl.
I think this could make for a pretty decent movie, providing it doesn’t take itself to seriously. That’s the main problem I have with this, you have it as a horror but I personally think it’d be better as a horror comedy in the vein of rocky horror picture show.
John I Revised it, take a look at the comment above, it originally was much more of a comedy but for some reason I felt the need to just make it a horror film, I have since corrected that thanks to LOGLINE.
So I’m in the final stages of DADDY’S GIRL, working title, originally it was a 40 page short film but now it’s a full blown feature.
So I?m in the final stages of DADDY?S GIRL, working title, originally it was a 40 page short film but now it?s a full blown feature.