A struggling novelist on a deadline takes a job as a obituary writer while he gets over his ex-wife and the deaths he writes about expose truths in his own life.
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A struggling novelist on a deadline takes a job as a obituary writer while he gets over his ex-wife and the deaths he writes about expose truths in his own life.
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Hi – I think this is well formed already, with a little tweak it’ll be a thumbs up.
This is a comedy so the obits are revealing something humorous but you say the “deaths he writes about expose truths in his own life.” This is too vague. Are they truths? Or are they funny? Try giving an example of what the truths are, especially if it’s the theme of the story (learns to laugh at oneself). I don’t think “on a deadline” is relevant since you couldn’t tell us the consequences of missing the deadline with any brevity.
The plot is vague in this concept as it lacks detail, an inciting incident and goal.
What is the main character’s flaw?
What event pushed / motivated him to do what he does?
What does he need to achieve by the end of the story?
Even in comedy a good story needs a good plot.
Have to agree with Nir Shelter here: I don’t see the story. What is the conflict? What is the “hook”? Is it essential that he gets over his ex-wife? Why should anyone care that he exposes truths about his own life? If it’s comedy, doesn’t sound like much fun to me right now – actually, the first time I read it I thought “hm, another drama”. Can you extract why your story is hilarious and put that into the logline?