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A tenacious art forgery expert, is dragged back in time when her brother?s diary reveals the location of stolen diamonds in a heist masterminded by her father.

A tenacious art forgery expert, is dragged back in time when her brother?s diary reveals the location of stolen diamonds in a heist masterminded by her father.
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    1. Uberwriter

      Is there actual time travel?

      try this “location of a diamond stolen by her father.” ?Then perhaps give the diamond some gravity “a diamond worth millions stolen by her father”

      But what does she want out of all this? ?Dorothy wanted to get home out of OZ. ?Is that her goal?

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    2. Singularity

      CraigDGriffiths confusion is understandable.?? Also, while a story may include flashbacks, a logline should focus on the forward movement of the story in time.? Even when the story is about coming to some reckoning?with an unpleasant past, it is done by means of action in the present tense toward a future objective goal.

      King Oedipus is “dragged back in time” to? reckon with his past, but that is not his dramatic purpose, his objective goal.? His objective goal is find out?the crime — who did what?– that has so?offend ?the gods that they have cursed the city of Thebes with the plague.

      So if it?is?not the case that the woman’s intentional objective goal is to be dragged back into the past, then what is it going forward?? What does she want to do, what must she do as a result of the information revealed in her brother’s diary?

      And what are the stakes for her?? And who opposes her effort? Is there competition — a villainous rival also seeking the stolen diamonds? (If not, why not?)

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