A vengeful young woman with a grudge about being conceived by anonymous sperm donation tracks down her biological father, who is now a successful gynaecologist, and plots with her scheming mother to take the place of his wife and daughter.

A protagonist doesn’t’ have to be sympathetic.? But she has to be interesting.? ?The character has to draw you into her world, her wild and crazy pov.??I? suggest that the character in this story be described for what she is, that your logline be an invitation for a script reader to go on a journey into a heart of darkness of a psychopath.

My first response was to try to normalize the story — hence, I tilted toward reworking it from the victim’s point of view.? But if you? are intent on telling? with her as the protagonist, then I think any attempt to normalize the story would only dilute the character.? ?What made “America Psycho” so? compelling is that? the story is told entirely from the pov of the psycho.? We enter his mind, his custom styled insane asylum.

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Agree with variable.?The daughter would seem to be antagonist, not a protagonist.? She does not seem to be a sympathetic character.? Her grudge is misplaced: after all, without his sperm donation she wouldn’t even exist.? And her objective goal is malevolent. And that he’s an arrogant prick? is not enough to? justify her goal in the eyes of an audience.? Because, again, whatever his motives were, whatever his character attributes, the fact is if he hadn’t made the donation, she would not exist.

It seems to me that the logline should .be framed from the father’s pov.