THE EQUALIZER
A veteran covert operative seeking redemption for his dark deeds quits a CIA-like agency and devotes himself to helping others where injustice has been done.
Share
Have an account? Sign In Now
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
This is more an interesting premise for an idea, its needs more relevant story for it to be an enthralling log line.
EG
we need to gets fragment of how the two stories collide (past and changed present) to propel our hero to take action for or against the CIA.
OR
How his dark past haunts him to reveal his character arc of change.
If he just goes off and makes nice with the natives its not a story as you are missing conflict. (even if the conflict is internal, you need to hint at it)
a good start.
further more, you title suggests something more that needs investigation.
what are you not telling me with a title like that, that should be in the log line?
Firstly, if this is a direct recast of the 80’s TV show of the same name (that starred Edward Woodward), then the writer had better have the proper rights to this, or else he will face heavy legal action. Not to mention that any truly professional producer will not touch this if the rights aren’t documented. (In LA this kind of stuff is a serious matter.)
Addressing the logline in isolation, the premise articulated is interesting, but does not seem to fit within the scope of a single feature film. It would work as logline for a TV series (assuming copyright hurdles can be overcome), but not as a pitch for a feature story.
The key thing missing in this logline is a clear story arc that a feature could contain. So, instead of telling the reader about generic and numerous sufferers of injustice, the logline should describe one or two specific innocents and a strong oppressor of both. Then the usual formula for a feature film logline can be started. For example, “A remorseful retired agent of a CIA-like organisation discovers kids in his underprivileged neighbourhood are being conscripted by the local drug gang. After making a solemn promise to a bleeding mother, he sets out to use all his black ops skills to put a stop to it.”
Steven Fernandez (Judge)
This really isn’t a logline it basically is one lengthy description designed to sound cool but, it doesn’t reveal anything about the protagonist..So other than being hard to like this character we don’t know him which basically means were not going to care as a audience………..What happens to him which is really important for your protagonist or he is going to sink in boredoom and lack of interest..So try to give us something we can identify , a weakness that we can feel for….maybe hint at his inner turmoil….Then the second half sure it’s atonement of ones sins but it’s to predictable…… Try….After a really horrible When a heartless Government agent is forced to battle his fathers death, he vowes to help the people he was once hired to hate, but when his 100th patient is a serial killer it’s time to crunch the numbers.