A witch want to made a world best perfume but she still left some ingredient to complete it,and she need to get her ingredient from the most dangerous forest in the world.

Yuen497,

Welcome on board, we hope the site will be of help to you.

Please read the ‘Rules’ section before posting again – you’re supposed to review two other loglines for every one you post, a rule you’ve neglected to abide by so far. As a result, any further posts will be deleted.

It also appears as though you didn’t read the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar, best you study the guidelines for industry standard logline construction. To get you started, the main character (in this case the witch) needs to be motivated by an event that will make him or her want to achieve a goal. In your next version, try to think of an event that will make the witch need to make the world’s best perfume. This will make her a motivated character with a dramatic need.

Other than that, I would guess that English is not your first language and suggest perhaps running the logline through a word processor for help with grammar and spelling. It would be very difficult for a producer to read past some of the rudimentary errors in this first attempt.

Otherwise, we all look forward to reading more of your work.