A woman cop uncovers scary evidence of an old murder and battles long-imbedded terrors to catch the serial killer before she becomes the next victim.
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A woman cop uncovers scary evidence of an old murder and battles long-imbedded terrors to catch the serial killer before she becomes the next victim.
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“long imbedded terrors” is too vague. And do you really need to describe the evidence as “scary”?
My suggestion would be: When a cop discovers new evidence of an old murder, she must catch the serial killer before she becomes his/her victim.
But I think something you should include is why she would be the next victim. ?Basically, how does the cop finding the evidence lead to her becoming the victim? Logically, it would obviously be that the serial killer wants to silence the cop, but how does the killer find out?
Just a suggestion, but I think that maybe making the targets the MC’s family or someone she cares about would raise the stakes, and not just make it a story about self-preservation.
My suggestion for this would be something like: When a serial killer escapes from prison, the cop who put him away must find him before he goes after her family.
Just something to think about.
Why would she become the next victim? Tie that in and it will make the story feel bigger and more together.
As Dkpough1 said the generic descriptions dilute the impact of the concept, best to be specific in your logline so as to set it apart from the rest in it’s genre.
That said, what is it about this “cop turned victim” story that would make it interesting or different to many other similar stories? How will the stakes be personal or higher for this cop than others to make it a more compelling story?
A female cop must stop a serial killer before she becomes his next victim.
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The details in the original logline are for the story proper but not necessary for a logline.?
For a twist:
A female cop?must stop a serial killer who only preys on female cops before she become his next victim.
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