A young ex-offender wearing a GPS ankle monitor finds himself on the run from the criminal gang he betrayed and must make it home across the city before his 10pm curfew or risk being recalled to prison.
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A young ex-offender wearing a GPS ankle monitor finds himself on the run from the criminal gang he betrayed and must make it home across the city before his 10pm curfew or risk being recalled to prison.
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Maybe I need more coffee but when reading “ankle monitor” I immediately jumped to – house arrest. Which made me do a double-take to read he was on the run in the city.
Leaning towards:
“An ankle monitored nark has three hours make it home before his 10 o’clock curfew when discovered by the inner-city gang he betrayed.”
Thanks for the kind words. Not sure how it works elsewhere but in the UK you can be out on probation and be made to wear an ankle monitor, but you need to keep away from exclusion zones and adhere to curfews. Thanks for your suggestion – i like it.
Curfew ankle monitors are a thang here in the states as well. Think about one of the more popular movies that featured ankle monitors e.g., 2018’s “Ant-Man and the Wasp” where Ant-Man is under house arrest via this device. This was one of the reasons that caused my re-read. Thus, I tried to reconstruct to enforce a curfew plot.
Make this your own – keep going, would love to watch!
Thanks!
Thanks for the kind words. Not sure how it works elsewhere but in the UK you can be out on probation and be made to wear an ankle monitor, but you need to keep away from exclusion zones and adhere to curfews. Thanks for your suggestion – i like it.
Your logline is crisp Odie. But now it misses the ‘Irony of conflict’ element of having to fight on two fronts; fighting (1)the criminals and (2)his curfew.
daleynixon could change “discovered” w/caught, rearrange the “When …” this is just what I can glean. I trust the author will take these suggestions and make them their own.