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A young man, sets out to defend his hometown when the psycho, who 15 years ago killed the young mans father, escapes from the asylum to begin his new murdering spree.

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      Singularity

      A timid young man must defend his hometown when the psychopath who killed his father 15 years ago escapes from an asylum and begins a new murder spree.
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      Singularity

      Except for the MC not being a cop, I’m not sure how this story differs from stories in most police procedural murder/serial murder episodes. Is there something else that can be added to make this story stand out, I ask as it reads like an incredibly familiar scenario – there is a killer on the loose and the good guy must stop him.
      Perhaps if the MC is in a wheel chair or agoraphobic his obstacle would make his story more interesting/original, or what if the killer had a unique method of berrying people alive so the MC has only a few days to find the victims before they suffocate.

      I’m sorry if I sound harsh, but I genuinely believe the concept falls in the “seen it” category and I also believe in being genuine…

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      Uberwriter

      “Perhaps if the MC is in a wheel chair or agoraphobic his obstacle would make his story more interesting/original, or what if the killer had a unique method of berrying people alive so the MC has only a few days to find the victims before they suffocate.”
      The fact that he’s not a cop is what is the challenge. He doesn’t have training, weapons, or resources to take on a seasoned killer. Giving him a disability would make the story less believable, because of his lack of training and disability combined. .
      It seems to differ in that it’s not a mystery at all; he knows who did it and is trying to stop him. He may have to figure out where he’s going and such, but as the genre is labelled ‘Horror’ it seems more horror than police procedural.
      Besides, it is similar to an established idea, the police procedural, yet it is different. While maybe you have run dry on standard police types(I don’t even watch procedural so I know how you feel), studios are still looking for them. It different enough to be a bit unique but familiar enough to probably not be considered a risk.
      I think making the killer unique is probably the way to go.?

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