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daleynixonLogliner
A young man wakes up in an alternate 2016 where the United Kingdom voted to remain in the European Union.
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Story: Lead character, inciting incident, Goal, Something or someone opposing that goal…
If you just have a character and inciting incident, then you only have a situation.
As a result, (I assume) your story has the other two elements, so I would add the Goal and What’s opposing the goal to the logline in order to make the logline more compelling.
And then what happens?
Tell us what this guy is going to do about it. Although there’s a 48% chance that he’ll do absolutely nothing about it at all and be perfectly delirious about this new development. You’ve only told us he’s a young man… that’s it. To make this a story he should be a fiercely loyal Remainer and he sees how terrible the future would be if the UK stayed in the EU… OR he’s a campaigning Brexiteer and he sees how good the future ends up if the UK stayed in. Either way, there MUST be some conflict. His world view must be challenged. Otherwise you simply have no story.
Writing a story about something like this, in my mind, has to be making a statement about it. What are you trying to say about Brexit?
As Richiev suggested, this logline is currently incomplete.
“When he wakes up in an alternate 2016 where the UK voted to remain in the EU, a staunch Brexiteer must…”
Hope this helps.
As the others have said.? And what’s the funny?? What is the running joke?? And what are his stakes in the situation?? Was he rabid opponent or supporter of Brexit?