A young woman, with the aid of her odd-ball friends learns to love life again after heartbreak.

Hey drewfoxsmith,

I see you posted your first logline here. Welcome!

First of all: have you read the formula on how successful loglines should be written? You can find it above right next to START HERE.

Your logline should have a main character (young woman), an inciting incident (call for action) and a goal your protagonist tries to achieve.

In your case, you have a main character (young woman), but the other two elements are missing. So ask yourself this:

• • what does my main character want (that’s the goal of the story; like finding a partner)?

• • what is the inciting incident in my story (e.g.: when the young woman gets fired)?

• • also: don’t use descriptions like ‘young’ when describing your main character: better go with a flaw like ‘abandoned’.

Your first attempt isn’t bad, but what you wrote here is mostly a summary of the plot with the life lesson of your main character. But your logline should be about the visual goal your character goes after in your story.