Apprehension
Abandoned by his platoon, a patriotic soldier befriends a young Muslim girl and must choose between protecting her or helping his team eradicate her village.
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Like your earlier “character must learn” logline – a character making a choice is a tough one to base a whole film around. It’s not much more than a beat in a story that is ultimately going to have many. So what is the story really about? Is the trouble when the soldier has made the decision, and must fight his old allies to protect his new allies?
Building to an agonizing moral dilemma is a great story telling technique, but how can it be that the protagonist is “abandoned by his platoon” while concurrently “helping his team to eradicate”?
Patriotic soldier is a goody-two-shoes. If he has a character flaw or moral weakness, we may find sympathy and decide to turn the page.
I’m not seeing the big moral dilemma between saving a girl’s life and slaughtering a village of innocent civilians. The harder the choices the protagonist faces, the better your story. This just seems like a no-brainer, no matter how patriotic he might be.