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Alan SmitheePenpusher
Posted: December 30, 20202020-12-30T09:08:38+10:00 2020-12-30T09:08:38+10:00In: SciFi

Knocked out and put in cryosleep for 30 years, a space soldier wakes up only to find his wife murdered and his child gone. His search for vengeance and motives will be tested upon finding out that it was his son the one responsible for the crime.

So, I wrote down this logline for an exercise. I find the concept behind it intriguing, although its form doesn’t really satisfy me.

Any thought and/or suggestion is appreciated! 🙂

P.S.: for clarity purposes,  the “son” I’m referring to is the actual protagonist’s child, come back from the future to try to change the past and prevent a global indicent.

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    1. Odie Samurai
      2021-01-01T03:57:57+10:00Added an answer on January 1, 2021 at 3:57 am

      Dig it! leaning towards:
      “When awakened from a 30-year cryosleep, a space solder sets out to exact vengeance against the ruthless murderer of his wife – his son.”

      Happy New Year!

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    2. ERRoot Penpusher
      2021-01-03T03:59:38+10:00Added an answer on January 3, 2021 at 3:59 am

      I agree with Odie. Leave out the Knocked out part and it feels like it is headed in the right direction.

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