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Posted: 2016-09-23T16:25:05+10:00 In:

When their doppelg?ngers skip-out on a caf? bill, an elegant Man and Woman sift through notebooks and dust impressions to determine who will pay.

When their doppelg?ngers skip-out on a caf? bill, an elegant Man and Woman sift through notebooks and dust impressions to determine who will pay.
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    1. Logliner

      Hi folks,

      Sorry if I’ve done this wrong.

      I’m not sure where I put a revision to a logline. Do we put it on the same page as the original or post it as new?

      Also, is posting in the student loglines the correct place for students in Karel’s course to post original work?

      One more question: is there a “flag” of some sort that indicates someone has responded to our comments, sort of like Facebook, where it lets you know there are new comments without having to scroll through your conversations?

      Thanks for your patience. 🙂

      Cheers, SWS

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    2. Singularity

      Hi SouthWestSusie

      You can post your loglines in any genre?they fit in regardless the classes you’re attending. If you wish to revise an existing logline, follow DPG’s explanation above. However, if you feel as though you’ve significantly changed a logline and or it has fallen too far back in older pages then you can post it in a new thread.

      We only ask that you not post the same logline a fresh in a new thread with each change you make – the idea is then more people can see how it progressed and learn from it.

      As for this logline.

      The plot is unclear; who are the couple that run out on the bill? Who are the elegant man and woman? How does their sifting through note books have any impact on the cafe bill? What is at stake?

      There are too many questions raised in this logline, and as a result it causes confusion instead of intrigue.
      Think of a logline as a linear description of the major events in a story:
      A significant event motivates a flawed main character to take action in order to achieve a compelling goal.

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