Singularity
Posted: 2020-02-20T07:27:21+10:00 In:

After a machete wielding gang murder his partner, a vengeful drug mule hides with a geriatric cripple in his station wagon, to chase and kill the psychotic crew.

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    1. Logliner

      This logline works pretty well, although I agree it could be shorter.? However,? the problem that comes through in the character of the mule. His only characteristic is that he is vengeful – which happens during the story. Who is he before this? Also, is a simple drug mule really going to become an enforcer? If he was a violent character, wouldn’t he normally have ended up in some other role than mule? Has he snapped, or have they mistakenly messed with the wrong guy?

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    2. Samurai

      Hi Nir,

      I’m guessing that there would be some comedic elements to the story – dark humour? ?The geriatric cripple definitely make me smile! ?(not sure what that says about me!!!) My thoughts are:

      • Do you need “After a machete wielding gang murder his partner” – would “When a gang murder his partner” suffice?
      • I’m not sure of the connection of the drug mule to the geriatric cripple with a station wagon? ? It seems like a random pairing.
      • “Vengeful” – is this needed as you already infer revenge in his actions? ?Could you describe him another way?
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