After a shape shifter uses her powers to save the life of her best friend who was raped, she must confront and destroy the village witch doctor who controls the village.
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After a shape shifter uses her powers to save the life of her best friend who was raped, she must confront and destroy the village witch doctor who controls the village.
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thank you for your review, and yes it would?a journey for the shape shifter who has discovered that she can shift through a trumatic experience. Putting that in the logline and confining it to one sentence is quite a challenge, as I am definitely knew at this. ?This idea was born from a dream I had a few years ago and thought it would be interesting to see if I could turn it into a book. You have outlayed an excellent premise as to where my story can go. Thank you.
After a shape shifter discovers she has a transforming power when she saves ?her best friend from being raped, she must convince the village witch doctor who witnesses her conversion of her right to life before he issues orders to have the shape shifter killed.
Catydid52:
Your logline has been rattling around in my skull (a good thing!) because I find the kernel of the premise promising. ?That is, my mind is hooked on the notion of a shape shifting protagonist.
However:
Taking your version at face value, it seems as if the story opens with the protagonist already in full shape shifter mode. ?Her magical ability just magically appears in the 1st Act like a rabbit being pulled out of a hat. ?And then complications ensue.
However, I would like to suggest that it might be more dramatically interesting and emotionally effective if the arc of the plot utilized the paradigm of the “Hero’s Journey”. ?In that paradigm: Act 1: She discovers her potential to shape shift… ?Act 2: She must learn to use her emergent power well and wisely even as her nascent ability provokes conflict with her nemesis, the witch doctor. ?A conflict which escalates to… Act 3: A life or death struggle High Noon showdown with her nemesis which is the supreme test of her power.
Maybe you have that kind of story arc in mind. ?if so, ?I don’t see it reflected in the logline. ?Whatever, my point is that the ?the logline would have stronger appeal if it ?suggested a “Hero’s Journey” framework for the plot.
Two excellent examples of this story arc can be found in the origin stories that launched the “Star Wars” and “Harry Potter” franchises. ?The franchises have been so popular and commercially successful because the films aren’t just about characters with magical powers. ?The films are about characters who must learn to use their powers they have been gifted with. ?And learn through setbacks and suffering.
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After a shape shifter uses her powers to save her best friend from being raped, she must convince the village witch doctor who witnesses her conversion of her right to life before he issues orders to have the shape shifter killed.
What does “confront” mean? ?How does that translate into a specific plot, a specific objective goal? ?By the time of the FADE OUT what must she accomplish? ?Or else — what are the stakes if the “confrontation” fails?
After a shape shifter uses her powers to save her best friend from being raped, she must confront the village witch doctor who witnesses her conversion and issues orders to have the shape shifter killed.
Catydid52,
It seems as if you’ve posted the same concept three times in three different threads, please refrain from multiple new threads of the same concept. If you keep all iterations under the original post, you and others can track its evolution and learn more from the process.
I suggest you check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar as your attempts seem to lack the basic structural requirements of a logline.
About this one, is her friend under a threat of rape or death? you write she saves her life, but also specify that she was raped – which is it she saves her friend from? Either is fine for the story, but you need to be specific in the details.
Last thing, why must she destroy the doctor? What did the doctor do? Is he or she threatening the friend?