After being accidentally injected with an experimental hyper adrenaline drug, a skinny, shy and dull-life man must learn how to use his newly ultra-energized body to escape from a secret government organization which is on the hunt for him.
JMLogliner
After being accidentally injected with an experimental hyper adrenaline drug, a skinny, shy and dull-life man must learn how to use his newly ultra-energized body to escape from a secret government organization which is on the hunt for him.
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Excellent! A nitpick/suggestion, I’d consider using “lifeless” over “dull-life” which sounds a little awkward imo
One point about word count, If the lead character must escape from a secret government organization, it’s implied that they are on the hunt for him. So you can drop the last part of the logline, save on the word count, and the logline will still have the same meaning.
Just a thought, good luck with this.
Example, using input from the community:
“When injected with an experimental adrenaline-charged drug, a lifeless highschooler must use his newly ultra-energized powers to [GOAL]“
Consider the following:
So, is the goal to escape a nefarious government organization? Ok, but they will keep coming.
What is the purpose of this drug? Was it meant for soldiers – you get the idea.
Is there a singular baddie in charge of this ambiguous organization?
Hope this helps with the goal, keep going!