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savinh0Samurai
Posted: May 11, 20202020-05-11T17:17:26+10:00 2020-05-11T17:17:26+10:00In: Romance

After falling in love with twin sisters, an irresolute Iranian student has to decide with whom he wants to spend his life with before getting forcibly married to an unkown woman by his family.

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      Mike Pedley Singularity
      2020-05-14T19:28:29+10:00Added an answer on May 14, 2020 at 7:28 pm

      Making a decision is not an objective visual goal. It happens in the character’s head. How is this represented on screen?

      “After falling in love with twin sisters” – an inciting incident should be one moment, one scene – a shark eats a tourist/he discovers a lost alien in his bike shed etc. After he fell in love with the first, he suddenly falls in love with the second too? I worry that he’s coming across as someone who doesn’t really know what he wants and it’s difficult to get behind a protagonist who doesn’t have a clear objective.

      I think the whole arranged marriage element is interesting. However, I’m conscious that it’s been done before – Brick Lane, The Big Sick, Arthur – so what’s different here? I agree wholeheartedly with yqwertz with this feeling like a male-fantasy, with two dimensional female characters.

      Conflict wise, I agree there is some conflict to be found AFTER he’s made his decision. But, before this point, all the conflict is inside his head. What’s happening on screen?

      Hope this helps.

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      yqwertz Mentor
      2020-05-12T17:57:09+10:00Added an answer on May 12, 2020 at 5:57 pm

      This sounds more like a male-fantasy comedy than a romance. There is a place for women without agency in the former but not the latter, especially if the film is set in the 21st century.

      Also, there does not seem to be much conflict. Sure, the man is irresolute, but that does not seem like a big problem when both choices mean a happy ending. Try to figure a way to up the stakes regardless of genre.

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      Odie Samurai
      2020-05-12T06:24:14+10:00Added an answer on May 12, 2020 at 6:24 am

      I dig it Savinh0.

      Since he is a student, I used the graduation as a deadline:
      After falling for twin sisters, an Iranian student must decide whom he wants to marry before the arranged marriage to a stranger upon his graduation.

      • Why Iranian? India tops Iran in arranged/forced marriages.
      • There could be an angle where the sisters are from his (village), and he is an accomplished student that is going places (big city) and the person whom his parents want to hook him up with is a (big city girl) with lots of connections.
      • Appears polygamy is legal in Iran, so there could be a (sister wives) scenario where the student must convince all parties ?they? are in love and must accept their choice to thwart the arranged marriage.

      Keep it up!

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