Logliner
Posted: 2019-09-20T13:32:37+10:00 In:

After starting a commune in the aftermath of Woodstock, a group of hippies has to resort to stealing from a hermit chicken farmer. All goes well until they kill his favorite hen… Now it?s his time to kill.

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    1. Mentor

      Who is the main character and what do they want? To survive the onslaught, one of the hippies will have to give up their pacifist ideals to kill the farmer. That person is the main character and the logline should be written from their POV.

      If you want the farmer to be the main character, then tell us about his motives and goals. (Wiping out an entire commune for one chicken is not a goal we can sympathize with – unless this is a black comedy and you can make us feel he is somehow the victim.)

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    2. Singularity

      Agreed, who is the lead character?

      “After they kill his favorite chicken, a hermit farmer seeks revenge on the hippies who kill his favorite pet.”

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    3. Penpusher

      Creo que est? muy bien, pero yo la cerr? con: …y hasta ah? lleg? el “paz y amor”

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    4. Penpusher

      A hilarious premise! I agree with the first comment about the clarifying the main character. Also, just a thought, since they are hippies maybe they kidnap the chicken thinking they are ?saving? it from being dinner. Then the farmer goes Rambo on their asses. Honestly though, this made me cluck in amusement! Keep it up!

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    5. Samurai

      “In Woodstock’s aftermath, after stealing a chicken from an old hermit’s farm, a hippy and her friends must survive his chainsaw rampage.

      Or whatever his rampage looks like.

      I also suggest you give a clue of the protagonist’s flaw, so that you hint some inner journey?although in a horror premise that may be too much.

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