After surviving a brutal attack, Rio Madrid, a young Latina living in a small, Texas border town, discovers she is a direct descendant of Aztec gods and becomes the target of supernatural enemies who have been hunting down her bloodline, one by one, throughout time.

No need to mention the main character’s name, unless the concept is a biopic or historical document.

The inciting incident is mentioned only about half way through the logline “…becomes the target of supernatural enemies…” best to bring it in earlier. This will free up some word space and allow for a better antagonist description, the antagonists sound too vague for the threat to come across. There have been many stories about heroes fighting supernatural enemies, what is it about these enemies that will make this story stand apart? Also the type of supernatural will define the genre, are these ghosts, demonic monsters, evil super humans or zombies?

Secondly the main character is described as a rather passive character, she becomes the target but what does she do then? Obviously she will fight, so best to word the logline in a way that will aid the reader understand the action nature of the story. Most importantly the logline lacks a goal, define the objective need of the main character without this the plot is vague.