Penpusher
Posted: 2021-09-01T19:33:42+10:00 In:

After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction until he finds fulfillment in his long-forgotten passion: dancing

or Logline #2:

After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction and leaves his old life for a long-forgotten passion: dancing.

 

Can you imagine/picture it? Does it make sense to YOU?

Or does it (drug addiction, dancing) need to be explained further/differently?

And which one do you like better?

 

Thanks xx

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    1. I like it! It makes sense to me and I picture it being a drama, maybe with some comedy. I would specify the drug(s) he’s addicted to and what form of dancing your MC does. I prefer Logline #2 because “leaves his old life” paints a clearer picture than saying: “until he finds fulfillment”. I would add what the main obstacle is for your MC, what has the potential to negatively affect his life? Is your MC still an addict after finding his true calling?

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    2. Singularity

      What is standing in the lead character’s way?

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