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Posted: 2017-03-20T20:58:47+10:00 In:

An affair between a recluse yacht owner and a little known actress gets tangled when they discover one another ambitious tramps who team up to fleece the jet set but recluses ex returns to love with revenge as an IRS sting – SuperTramps

An affair between a recluse yacht owner and a little known actress gets tangled when they discover one another ambitious tramps who team up to fleece the jet set but recluses ex returns to love with revenge as an IRS sting – SuperTramps
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    4 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      The logline sets up an interesting situation. ?But it still lacks a clearly defined objective goal. ?A logline should signal where the story is going (not, however, whether it gets there), IOW: a plot. ?The signal of where the story is going is conveyed by the objective goal.

      How does the situation of getting into a tangle translate into a plot? ?As a result of the “tangle” what do they decide to do? ?What becomes their objective goal? ?Where is this story going?

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    2. Logliner

      Thanks Dpg

      Please give some plot ideas that hit you on first thoughts

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    3. Uberwriter

      I’d remove the Jekyll and Hyde reference and replace it with something else and then extend or ‘finish’ the sentence after tramp to include what the goal will be after they discover each others true intentions. Add a time-bomb element to it.

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    4. Singularity

      When they discover each other is an overambitious tramp, Two gold diggers who each though the other was a millionaire must… (Do this thing)

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