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Posted: 2019-12-16T08:52:57+10:00 In:

An alter consciously riddled coma patient continues the struggle for his life and identity when he startles into traumatic recovery in search of a mysterious girl with an image

  • An alter consciously riddled coma patient continues the struggle for his life and identity when he startles into traumatic recovery in search of a mysterious girl with an image?
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    1. Best Answer
      Singularity

      “Alter consciously riddled”? ???? What does that mean?

      “A mysterious girl with an image”.? ???

      The logline is confusing.? I have no clear idea what the story is about.

      Nor what the stakes are.? Stakes as in: So what if he doesn’t find the mysterious girl?? What does he stand to lose, how will he suffer if he fails?? And why should an audience care whether he finds her or not?

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    2. Best Answer
      Samurai

      I get the impression that Dbdb4 has written the logline in a different language, and run it through Google Translate, or some other translation software, but not bothered to find out if the translated version makes sense.

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