An Amature Drug-dealer decides to sell drugs by Dark Web, But he realizes it is not like he thought.

“An Amature Drug-dealer decides to sell drugs by Dark Web, But he realizes it is not like he thought.”

I agree with most of the above. The one thing I don’t necessarily agree with is that a character who is a drug dealer is inherently unsympathetic. ?I’m not saying people should deal drugs, but writing off anyone who deals drugs as bad and unsympathetic is a large generalization. Sure, there are of course those guys who will gun down people and such, but likewise there are ones who have to find a way to make money and can’t get a legit job. They all have reasons, whatever they are, and like it or not, even if drugs are criminalized and illegal, people will still buy them, and those dealers provide a service. (Personally I think marijuana should be legalized and regulated. And rather than throwing drug users into prison they should be provided rehabilitation. ?But that’s a different discussion.)

The more important thing to make a character connect with an audience is make sure the audience understands why the character is doing what they’re doing, or empathy. Personality traits are more important in creating a likable, and sympathetic character.

The problem with the logline is that it doesn’t describe a goal. It doesn’t even describe the character’s personality traits. It describes a single decision, and not much else. ?What happens, what is the character’s goal? What is the event that upsets his status quo?

Here’s an example using elements from the original post:?After a drug deal goes bad, a struggling college student must turn to the dark web to sell drugs so he can pay for the medication that is keeping his sister alive.?(33)