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sek505Logliner
An emotionally-detached Forest Ranger rescues a traumatized boy from an abandoned logging site and must fight for survival against prehistoric creatures that were awakened during deforestation.
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The gist of the story is clear. I wonder though why an “emotionally-detached” forest ranger would risk anything to save a traumatized boy he does not know? What wakes his father instincts? You might strengthen the logline by making the boy the ranger’s nephew rather than a stranger.
Also, why is the boy at a logging site? Logging sites are places where men work. Would a camp site do as well?
E.g.,
When a ranger comes across a ravaged camp site and find his young nephew is the only survivor, he must save them both from prehistoric creatures awakened by nearby loggers.
Just some food for thought…
It is really good. It plants a nice seed in my head and I already see images flourishing.
I suggest that the main event is the appearance of the prehistoric creatures:
“When a deforestation wakes a pack of prehistoric carnivours, an emotionally-detached Forest Ranger must fight for survival while protecting a boy he has rescued.”