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Posted: 2017-10-09T17:00:33+10:00 In:

An engineer of peace have to lead war against the machines when the established, human safe heaven on mars gets threatened by the past.

An engineer of peace have to lead war against the machines when the established, human safe heaven on mars gets threatened by the past.
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    1. Best Answer
      Singularity

      This strongly resembles The Terminator premise – this will be a tough sell.

      In any event, the details need clarification. What specific event pushes the MC to need to defeat the robots? Did they kill his mother, lover or friend? Did they land an invasion force on Mars?
      Whatever it is that made him have to take action, it needs to be clearly described in the logline.

      The MC leading a war is too vague and unspecific. What does the MC want? Peace with the robots? To destroy them all? To change the source code in their central computer? Whatever it is he wants to do, or in other words, his goal also needs to be clearly described in the logline.

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      Singularity

      Foxtrot25’s version is an interesting one.? But because of the wording, some of it grammatical, I’m not sure his version incorporates the story you want to tell.

      What’s the difference between an “engineer of peace” and a peace activist?? And how does a war against machines correlate with a threat from the past?? What’s is the conflict really about?? What?is really at stake here?

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      Uberwriter

      An engineer of peace has to wage war? He sucks at his job, if that’s the case, don’t ya think? Ya, I really do think.

      An engineer must help defend a Mar’s outpost from time-traveling machines of war.

      Sounds like Terminator on another planet.

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