Pour The Throttle To It
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An ex-junky survives a plane crash before losing his company to the FEDS, but to stop the tailspin, he’ll sacrifice his life for his family’s future.
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it does, thank you
The events leading up to the catalyst are super interesting but the Goal/Action is very vague. What does “sacrifice his life” mean? Is he taking on the federal government to get his company back? Is he joining the mafia to get money for his family? Is he performing seppuku to save his families honor? Try focusing less on the catalyst events and more on his goal and why it’s important for his family’s future.
Example:
After a series of tragic events, a recovering addict and loyal father must take on rogue federal agents to uncover a conspiracy that threatens the happiness and safety of his family.
I hope this is helpful! 😀