An experienced psychologist is accused of the murder of an innocent girl when his only un-treated patient discovers a talent for art, and creates a piece depicting the scene, 2 weeks before the murder. His whole career depends on proving his innocence, innocence he believes his patient is far from. (I will post a synopsis explaining details soon, i'm still going through development, these are the first ideas)

Yeh that will defiantly improve it, however he is not racing to prove his innocence before the murder it’s only after the murder when the Painting is relevant. However i’m still writing it and it’s not a simple story line there’s a lot of twists. When i’v finished ill post a synopsis and then hopefully people can help me get the logline perfect !

Ok here’s a new story line. The new Title is ”Death Mute”

It starts in a prison, 40 years after the murder of Daisy Smith, a 9 year old girl. We see a character called Anthony enter a room where he sits down to a man in his late 60’s. There the man writes on a notepad ”Long time no see”. Then we zoom 40 years earlier. Anthony Shaw is a Probation Officer, visiting a new criminal, Neal, a mentally disabled man who is a deaf mute. Neal only writes. Upon his arrival, Anthony’s brother who works along side Anthony asks him to explore what Neal is interested in/ talents. After getting to know Neal, he discovers he has a secret passion for painting. A few weeks later, Neal retreats from one of his cupboards full of Art work and pulls out a Panting of Anthony Strangling a girl by a river. Anthony immediately try’s to dispose of this, then coincidentally the next day the girl is found dead. From the viewers point of view Anthony Seems totally innocent because they have followed his every foot step. When trying to dispose of the painting, one of Anthony’s brother catches a glimpse of the painting. Anthony is led to believe that Neal murdered the girl, the painting was proof that he was planning it. The rest of the story is Anthony trying to gather evidence against him before approaching his brother. He starts by trying to question Neal, however he has already fled. He searches the house and finds other horrific paintings. He then visits who he believes is Neal’s father. Neal’s ”father” claims that ”Neal left my heart a long time ago”. Anthony finds some basic information about Neal. Anthony gets to his own home and discovers loads of painting strung up on his wall. He then meets somebody who claims to be a ‘friend’ of Neal who says that he ‘sets people up, makes it as if he never existed’ He starts getting frustrated thinking he has been set up, finally approaches brother for help on the case, his brother states that he had never heard of a Neal. He visits the old house again and the new owners claim that the house was owned by an Old woman. Anthony starts going crazy, and is then brought into custody by his brother. His brother sits him down and explains that there is no Neal, He tells Anthony that he isn’t even a Probabtion officer. His brother offered to look after Anthony after his mother died by taking him out of a mental home after a mild incident. His brother explains that he has had his suspicions about Anthony and finally stopped denying that Anthony was killing these people. He explains to Anthony that after being offered to leave the institution, it was a possibility that Anthony would develop multiple characters to cover up guilt, Neal was a character that Anthony created to convince himself that he was innocent and didn’t commit the crimes. 40 years later we are back in the hospital, Anthony enters as an older self and sits down to a table. Then the old man (We don’t see his face) says ”Long time no see”. Anthony asks the man ”Why don’t you speak”. The old man try’s to leap from his chair and shouts ”Because nobody Listens !”. We then see that the old man is also Anthony. Then blackout.

Its not the best concept at the moment and i know it has links to novels like ”Shutter island” And films such as Inception, but i have tried to make it as original as possible.